Please watch the two video clips closely and pay attention to how to improve your cohesion and coherence in your own writing (Advantages and Disadvantages of Developing Tourism). Post your revised writing here (marked in different colors) after modification based on your notes from the two video clips. 请用不同颜色的笔将修改出处标出来。也可以传word文档,附上原文和修改稿,将修改稿中体现cohesion和coherence的地方以及修改过的地方用不同的颜色标注出来。 ielts-writing-task-2-coherence-and-cohesion.mp4 cohesion-coherence-in-essay-writing.mp4