Try to change example 2 into a point-by-point organization. Example 2: Having been a full-time mom for a year, I needn ’ t be told that stay-at-home mothers are under more stress than moms who work. When I was working as a freelance writer, my income, together with my husband ’ s, afforded us a relatively comfortable life. At the same time, my work won me an impressed look on people ’ s faces when I told them what I did for a living. Moreover, talking to as many as 15 people a day about everything from cosmetic surgery to crime victims, I never felt in need of topics for the evening conversation with my husband. That made up an important part of my married life. However, since I decided not to miss my last chance to experience the life as a full-time mom, everything has been different. The first change I had to get used to was to cut back on expenses. Living on one person ’ s income now, we can ’ t afford restaurants, dry cleaners, fitness classes, vacations or expensive presents. More significantly, without my work, my self-esteem plummets. I ’ ve lost the approval and prestige that come with a career, and the emotional rewards of productivity. Furthermore, my marriage suffers. With no money for babysitters, restaurants or movies, my husband and I have lost our few outlets for having fun together. And being out of contact with the bigger world, I find myself no longer able to offer interesting material for conversation. In conclusion, I have learned plenty from my year ’ s experience of being a full-time mother.